Tuesday, July 10, 2018

The Trench Rats (Original Draft) Chapter 3

Chapter 3
Gold Drops In


One of Gold Rat's favorite things to do was to fly his eagle over to Inspector Dobermann's place and tease the guard dogs, as well as sometimes whacking Dobermann upside the head. The other rats [sic] would wait impatiently for his return when he would tell them the look on Dobermann's face. This was always sure to get more than a laugh. It worried Black that Gold was so reckless, but he decided there was nothing he could do.

That's what Gold had planned on doing today. Burgundy, Black, and Blue watched disapprovingly as he readied up his eagle, but several other rats [sic] watched with growing excitement.

"You gonna get Dobey good?" one rat [sic] asked hopefully.

"Oh, sure," Gold replied in a casual tone.

"Ha, I bet Dobey don't suspect a thing!" Red Rat, Gold's best friend, cheered. [Note--the importance of Red Rat as a supporting character and Gold's best friend has diminished. By now he has practically vanished from the series.]

"Gold, you really shouldn't be doing this," Black warned.

"Don't worry!" Gold said. "God created Dobermann so we could humiliate him. If He didn't, then there's no use for him, is there?" He got on the bird's back and they were off.

"Get him good, Gold, get him good!" the rat [sic] shouted.

Gold scanned the ground for any new sights. Most of the rodents' concentration camps were ruined or deserted because of the raids. Then Gold smiled. He could make out the huge red, black, and white swastika banner hanging near the Dobermann estate. Then he could see the dreary-looking house itself, and a wide fenced-in area--complete with four giant doberman pinschers.

"Ho ho, here we go!" Gold laughed, and brought the eagle into a nosedive. The dogs saw him and jumped to their feet, barking. The eagle hit one in the nose, and it ran off whimpering. The other three continued to chase after him, and he led them right SMACK! into the fence. Two of them collapsed, but the last one, whom Gold had nicknamed Captain Crunch because of his sharp teeth, shook his head and followed him around and around. Gold turned away for a moment when he heard a loud CRASH!

Turning back, he saw that Captain Crunch had run into Inspector Dobermann.

"You stupid MUTT!!" Inspector Dobermann screeched, whacking the dog on the head. The pinscher whimpered as if to say, "I'm sorry."

Dobermann picked up his machine gun and aimed at Gold. The rat-tat-tat-tat made Gold realize just how much danger he was in. He swooped this way and that, promising himself that he would have Black teach him some flight ticks. I'll be better to Black, I'll be better to Burgundy, I'll be better to all of them, he thought, when suddenly WHUMP! Dobermann groaned and fell down. The eagle perched in a tree, swaying dizzily. Gold shook his head. He'd knocked Dobermann out! He'd never done that before! This gave him a good chance to search for any documents! He flew down and noticed that Inspector Dobermann had hit the dog with a document, and he picked it up. Inside he found two more, one signed by Woofwoof Hitler and the other blank. [Note--"Woofwoof Hitler," a comedic attempt, has since been dropped from the series altogether.] Gathering them under his arm, he and the eagle flew off.

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